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This was really well done, great job. You spaced out everything added depth to each character and were straight forward with your words good job! :elephant:

Wow, and I don't like poetry that much so this is really good for me to be saying wow!!!!! I really liked it! It was deep and meaningful good work! ...

Kind of small yet still very good. And I like the name! Otherwise I think you have a lot of dialouge but still it wasn't to much because there was ...

Good job on this, I really liked it. :D I was interested from the beginning and still was interested at the end, great job! :lol:

A few grammar mistakes in this though otherwise really well done. I was hooked on everything you wrote and kept wishing for more when I had finished, excllent work on ...

I love fantasy stories!!!! This is really well written with good action and loads of adventure!!! I loved it great job, no problems with me so yeah great job! :elephant:

Wow...this is really good. The explanantion is especially good work on it!! I can't wait for the next one, I found no mistakes maybe a little in hte grammar but ...

Long and effective, this is really well written. You explained evreything well from the place and the characters good job. :elephant: I have no problems with this so yeah..good luck ...

Hahaha that's really good. Exciting and awesome I kept reading till it was finished..can't wait to see the other one. I found no grammar error or spelling mistakes (but that ...