Ittybritty

The plot is completely unrealistic. I know this might be fiction but still it's very far fetched for any of the events you described to take place so maybe next ...

If you were to give me all that was within your heart I wouldn’t be afraid to tear it apart You've mixed tenses, it makes it kinda hard to figure ...

Hey, great idea behind this story and I really liked the ending. As far as critiquing goes, all I found was two teeny typing errors. 'Bead' instead of bed and ...