Israeli_Camel

Name: Ben Washington Age: 18 Grade: 12 Personality: A tall, muscle-built football player, Ben is actually the kind of person that keeps to himself. He is, in a way, mysterious. ...

That was really good! I like how you got the words of your grandmother into text (or should I say, story)! A few questions though (about the story itself, I'm ...

The day is January 15, 2009. Published author and high school freshman Asher Edelson sits at his laptop, and gets ready to start his family history book. Let’s take it ...

You did a good job on this! :wink: Although I have a few tips that might make this better... For the Jewish family that you were describing in this story, ...

This is good! I would have to agree with Eyes of Eden; always try to put some emotion into the story and also set the scene a bit more. Otherwise, ...

Days in Autumnwood were always pleasurable and sunny. The breeze was always gentle. It was beautiful and quiet. One could always smell the flowers or hear the running of rivers. ...