Iridescent

Besides the few mentioned errors and such, I feel as though you could have given us more. I mean, you're writing about a very dramatic time. You covered it beautifully ...

Wonderful poem! Just a little nitpicking...I wasn't sure if when you said "And in the soft glow of the pallid moon,they quit the sky;wishes forsaken" You meant 'quit the sky' ...

I had to. They forced me to write in a story in the fifth grade, and eh, now I do it in my spare time.

I loved it. Your writing is very...hard-core, packed with emotion and voice. The storyline actually sort of reminds me of Cornelia Funke's Inkheart, if you've ever read it. But I ...

Two questions :) First off, is there anyway I could change my age? I screwed up the years when I was registering, I'm not 30, I'm fourteen :) Also, how ...

Overall, the piece was ok. It basically seem liked two girls passing note. I feel as though more feeling and emotion could have been shown within the actions of the ...