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Re: chapter 1 to my book {still a draft}
Okay I thought this was pretty good with just a few problems. 1. You need to put the dialogue into different paragraphs, It makes it easier to read and to ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Your Naruto Life Story Chapter 1
YOu made a couple typos but it was really good. The fact that you wrote it in second person was even better. I love writing in second person and i ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Bulletproof
Wow That was really good. I do have to agree with the semi-colon error, but other than that it was pretty good. I did notice that the character did contradict ...
May 24, 2007