Indianwarrior12

Some call me M.I.A Some say I can't go home again Some say I chose to stay I am the unknown soldier Who you refuse to know A brother and ...

I liked this poem,but one thing i didn't get was Even as the winds serpent,viper and strike. personally it didnt make sense, but i did get what you trying to ...

This is a very good story but there are things to work on. They have been mentioned before so I won't bore you repeats. I did really enjoy the newscasts ...

Prologue On a deadly quiet night with no moon, a large ship sat anchored out to sea two-hundred miles from land, completely unaware of the danger less than a mile ...

i am a big fan of the warrior series and all in all this is a good story line, but it all seemed to happen very fast. there were alot ...

This is really good and I really want to keep reading hurry up and write more of it. There are some errors though like one place there should be Leg ...

This piece is really good and I really like it. I especially like Small tears of silver light tumbled in through the narrow windows. It's a very good story line ...

Chapter One As November sixteenth neared, strange things started happening to thirteen year old Diamond Anderson. Things had happened since she was born, but they had always been covered up. ...

i like the idea but you need to clarify a few points. you just kinda dropped on us that blue was a witch all of a sudden. it seems that ...

This is a very good story and i enjoy reading it. but there some things that you could do to make it read smoother. i noticed a lot of run ...

This is really good also but like I said i'm good at nitpicking but he had to this eyes to protect them from the blowing sand. I don't know if ...

this is a very good story. im really good at nit picking and i really cant find much to nit pick. i would really enjoy reading more of it.

That's a very good story and I would like to see more of it, but you could introduce the character a little more, like what's her name (or his)? I ...

Prologue "Push, Mrs. Anderson, push!" The doctor told the women giving birth. The women screamed and squeezed her husband's hand so hard that he yelled in pain. "I see the ...

I think that you should reword this Her head shot up as pain shot up her tail. It might be better if it was worded "Her head shot up as ...