Incandescence

zany, Thank you. That is all I can say. xantham, In defense, I think it may be the stark contrast in style between the two that has thrown you off. ...

You and me, girl, we belong in Paris when it's raining, holding hands (and broken pens), writing lacrimoso on the walls, quietly sipping our coffee and whispering so softly you ...

Hey xantham, You'll have to accept this as a partial payment for all your comments on my poems. I hope it buys me some more time. :) The first piece ...

Hi Splintered Thorn, A great amount of poetic sophistication can save this. It seems to me that you've hit the problem on the head when you say we're all trapped ...

All of the poetry I post up here is usually experimental. Si I'm reallyreallyreallyreally happy you thought it was a different writer. I've been trying for a long time to ...

Hey xantham_gum, IMHO, it took you way too long to reach your destination. There's a lot of trimming that needs to be done. A modified version follows. I smile at ...

ichoufani, I had a hard time making it through this. Not because of extreme poetic safistication, though. Maybe if you looked beyond the cliches of love and religion you could ...

ladydark, This is prose, not poetry. Each line begins an idea anew, and none seem to really connect to one another, to make something of them. While you do have ...

Hi Chandni, I haven't bought into this poem yet. This is only so-so on its own terms. Its principal fault is that it jumps around bigtime (from space-travel to music) ...

I don't think I've critted your work before. I like the topic of this poem, and the way you get right into it in S1, which I think is quite ...

For those of you who don't know, Ted Bundy was a serial killer. He would go from college campus to college campus brutally raping/torturing and killing college girls. His last ...

Jack, I keep coming back to this, trying to find a nice way to salvage it. Maybe some of the following suggestions will aid you in future development of this ...

Hi Mon Ange, There's a lot of fat-trimming that needs to be done here, and a lot of bridges that need to be established. There is so much in the ...

To you, Our love wasn't’t love, It was only game, A pigeon not a dove, Leaving me in shame. The poem at hand is not one to be read and ...

I would, as supplementary reading, suggest you read Franz Kafka's "The Metamorphosis," if you haven't already, and study the hermeneutics of capitalism from the vestiges of European literature. At lea