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Re: Silent Chaos
Ah, nitpicking. A great hobby to have. [quote]The explosion happened at mid-day. [/quote] Get rid of "at". Its just an extra word, and makes the sentance longer than it should ...
Sep 4, 2009 -
Re: Rose Picture
I really like the sepia in this picture. However, like my peers have said, the petals do not look natural. The grass takes away from the picture, but that's just ...
Sep 3, 2009 -
Re: I say 'pickle' you think 'pie'
You say Dracula I think Coffin
Sep 3, 2009 -
Re: Family Kidnapped By Ninjas--Need Ransom
I like this very much. It had a nice flow, the man himself is very believable. I actually saw someone holding a sign similar to that one. If you're submitting ...
Sep 3, 2009 -
Re: The (True) Story of Hansel and Gretel : Intro
I liked it. Seems like the back cover of a book. Please write more! The idea is (Hansel and Gretel, candy making witch) not original, although the twist you're putting ...
Sep 3, 2009 -
Re: Who's ready for NaNoWriMo?
I can't Wait! Its my first NaNoWriMo, due to the fact I joined half-way through November Lat Year. I'm So Excitied. ----Natasha----
Sep 3, 2009 -
Re: Imagine how the person above you looks like by their avatar
you look like what cario said
May 8, 2009 -
Re: Secret Secrets hurt everyone
"Please, Please, don't touch me..." He didn't listen, but continued taking off my clothing, crashing his lips againist mine, not letting go of my hands. I kicked him. He frowned, ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: Hell At One Window
This is great! everything is perfect! Please, please, write something else like it or I'll die. Just do what questions said and you'll be all good. that's all i have ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: Let Me Love You
I LOVE this. Characters: Well, can't say much about Isabella. Duh. jay: Seems very well-rounded. But for some reason, he needs short, blonde hair and a goatee. Don't ask me ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: Flying
I liked this. Everything seemed perrfectly fine to me =) Just fix the nitpicks I'm too lazy to point out and everyone else already did, and you'll be fine. Ohh, ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: It only gets worse - chapter 1 - adapted :)
Overall: Very good. Nice emotions and realistic dialouge. Characters: I got confused alot on who was who. Please add Liam whispered or Annie flipped her dark hair over should and ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: Woman of the future
kloka, I just noticed this in the corner of my screen! *coughToldyouweregoodatwritngpoetycough* its really good, but there are only a few minor details that need fixing.
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: I'm just a Friend....Just a friend (Part 1)
“C’mon. why won’t you tell me?” “You’d laugh.” “Alex, you’re my best friend. Sure, I’ll laugh, but then you’ll laugh, and it’ll all turn out okay.” My best friend, Amber, ...
Apr 30, 2009 -
Re: Always by your side
This is really, well written. For some reason I was painted the picture that you love your best friend, who's a guy? Or maybe that's just me, and my life. ...
Apr 28, 2009