Iamjustbored

While I do not entirely agree with your point of view, it does have some substance to it. It feels more of a rant than a persuasive essay, in any ...

Ever since I kindled my first fire in the winter of 2000 I have always disliked a fire’s final hour. Letting a fire die is like letting a relationship wither ...

You have a noticeable theme of Superiority. I would like to this the story develop. Perhaps Elizabeth's inferiority to her sister and her passiveness toward her mother indicates some sort ...

Well the quotes were because its an opening monologue. The entire story is not written in that format. He is talking with his daughter, and that leads into the actual ...

“When I was young I used to believe that the world was open. Open to ideas and to concepts never before thought up. I used to have the misconception that ...

You mention the polka-dot umbrella several times and i was wondering whether or not that plays some significance later in the story. It seems it could be a symbol for ...

:cry: *1st chapter is in a monologue style * “When I was young I used to believe that the world was open. Open to ideas and to concepts never before ...