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Re: Cry Wolf: Chapter 2
Hey! IamTraunt here! Your story is very detailed and descriptive! Well done! Just a few things you need to correct: "They don(')t exist.” That was his automatic reply but his ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: His Legacy - Chapter 2
Hey! IamTraunt! I found your relationships between characters very descriptive and very life-like! Well done! A few little things that need adjusting: "After one week with her(,) it seemed none ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: Howl - Chapter 8
Hey! IamTraunt here! Sunshine1113 is right. You are becoming a more experienced and emotive writer! I could hardly find any things to correct as your grammar is excellent. But here's ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 5: Three Weeks Left
Hey! I'm IamTruant! This story is great. I find Ashton's longing to go out with Reagan so sweet. And some of your vocab. Pretty nifty. Just some minor mistakes: "him. ...
Mar 19, 2014 -
Re: Howl - Chapter 7
Hey! IamTruant here! Your story is amazing. Love how you put so much feeling into the protagonist's point of view, how you describe Blue's feelings and surroundings makes me feel ...
Mar 19, 2014 -
Re: Of Fights and Letters: Chapter 4: Nico
Wow! Brilliant chapter in "Of Fights and Letters", no matter how short. Though I'd adjust some things, like: " 'Oh my gosh! I am so sorry - did I hurt ...
Mar 19, 2014