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Re: Godrunner
The other reviewers all have good advice. I think the most obvious problem was how he was describing himself. How would he know what he looked like? You'll need to ...
Dec 5, 2009 -
Re: First story-- part 2
Once again, your story is well written, and very interesting, but there are some mistakes. When you say "a black tee, black jeans, and black Converses", the story sounds slightly ...
Nov 28, 2009 -
Re: My first story-- about 1/4 of it, anyway. Part 1.
You did well on this. It kept me interested, though there were a few problems with grammar and spelling. There are a few problems that you should be aware of. ...
Nov 28, 2009