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Sorry if this "review" doesn't help you much, but I just wanted to say that I loved your piece. Fantastic, fantastic poetry.

Good poem; liked the flow. A few things I would change: black as ashes I recommend changing to just "ash" parched as though they have not been graced by rainfall. ...

Great poem! Loved it! There seems to be a lot of emotion in here, so maybe you could make it longer. Also, I think that you should, in the last ...

The river roared with the ferocity of a lion. Two classmates, who had previously been unknown to each other (although Claire had a crush on George), stare at it; one ...

Great poem! I can't really complain about anything.... It's a little cryptic, but that's ok. I guess all I can do is nitpick. Someone will replace me on this stage, ...

This is an essay that I wrote for school, but I'm thinking of making it better and keeping it in case I need a non-fiction writing sample. The thesis is: ...

This is a good piece; tons of emotion which is always fantastic. I would seriously consider changing the whole thing into the poem-like format that the latter half is in. ...

It was the end of the school year. That time of almost unparalleled joy for many students and teachers. Two such students, one with bouncy, curly blond hair and a ...

Great poem! Obviously dark, but that's ok. I loved the ending line. Stab me to death, Shank By shank. Where you can’t see me And you can’t touch me. I ...

It was a slow night at the MGM casino in Las Vegas when arguably the two most interesting patrons of the night walked in. Although their minds worked in similar ...

Okay, I'm going to be brutally honest. Sorry if I offend you. This piece needs some work. It starts off really well, but the ending is pretty weak. Mainly how ...

----------------- Let me just start out by saying this is a brilliant work in progress. I will commence nitpicking. The ringing sound of my open palm I would reword this ...

disguising ourselves in falsification. As each day passes we grow more insecure ; No longer the children we were once before . [Shed the mask before its too late. Begin ...

A mother’s grief; how she lost her child A child’s playground; swimming all day A training ground for athletes; swimming every day A pool of ideas; excellent for creative minds ...

Darkness and chilling, Frightened screams and deathly jeers; Tells the end is near. Sorry to ask you to change it again, but I don't think chilling is good enough (but ...