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Re: Hidden Amoung Nature
It would make a very nice start for a longer story - very nice descriptions, good vocab. You could, as advised before, try and expand it a little more - ...
Jul 17, 2008 -
Re: Yoir Arrayo - introdution (draft 2)
I edited it... Hope its better than v1!
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: Yoir Arrayo - introdution (draft 2)
Thanks, bubblewrapped for the very helpful review! I will edit this intro soon, and also post the 1st chapter. Thank you bunches - this really helps. Oh, and yes, Andy ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: An Apple and a Graveyard - Chap. 3
Really cool! I love your writing. Seriously can't wait for more. No errors etc... very creative.
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: An Apple and a Graveyard - Chap. 2
Hm... Very cool and interesting. Even better than the 1st chapter. I really like the suspense and mystery... Why could the girl see her? keep going - I can't wait ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: magic Kisses
Oh, by the way - I agree, the story does seem unrealistic. A 14 year old having sex?!
Jun 17, 2008