HorseFreak

It's very interesting, but there's a couple of mistakes: (quote) "I didn’t feel safe telling my “secret” to anyone but I felt safe with him, it was scaring me." Confusing... ...

I love this piece. Verey, very interesting, and very original. There is no other way to put it. Awesome story. It's very interesting, and I like the character and her ...

I like the way you present your character and go into your thoughts. It's a really good story actually. It's just about the first one that I've read that presents ...

My advice: Besides the grammar and lack of punctuation, try to make your characters more likable. Your story is too abrupt and quick - the reader can't catch up with ...