Hopeful_Youth

Ohh yes....i wrote it so quickly, i didn't really think of putting whisper. that would be a much better word. im glad i had fewer editing mistakes this time. :] ...

oh, well yeah I'm going to add a lot more detail to it once i start writing it. I'll definitely put flaws in each character, including the main character, and ...

p.s- Chirantha- it's too small because it's the prelude to the story :) and i realize that her thoughts are in quotations....but it was like she was sleep talking, you ...

Yeah that is true.....i can make it cheesy, or amazing, depending on , well, everything. Every author has his or her own voice, so i just have to use mine ...

Chirantha: lol it's not like she's lusting over him....ok, well, maybe, yes. haha. but, she can't help it. he's in her dreams. if you had reoccuring dreams about your perfect ...

I probably shouldn't be reading this story at night. lol. Well, you have to deal with your emotions someway, and panic seems like a sensible emotion to have at a ...

Nice you meet you Chirantha. You have a very interesting name. :] My hobbies are : Photography, writing stories, writing poems, reading, talking a walk, being in the wilderness, playing ...

A ghost of my past haunts my dreams Shallow breathing, Shaking hands A whisper in the shadows of my mind. It doesn't want to let me forget, But I will ...

There were a couple of lines that didn't make sense... "Back seas" I've never heard of a back it confused me a little bit. I noticed that a lot of ...

Yes, that helps alot, thankyou. :] I guess i didn't make the transition very clear...but the point of why i went from worrying about the ghost of the past to ...

please review this and tell me if you liked it, if it's too cheezy, anything to do with editing, ect. thanks! :] ~Prelude~ "Green. His eyes are Green!" My first ...

p.s, i hope you continue to write this story, it seems like it could really go somewhere. good luck! -[Megan]- please add me, also. ;]

"She could smell the sweetness of his mother’s cookies that were her trademark," maybe you could word this part better, something like " His Mother's trademark cookies" or ever "signature ...

oh, yeah i know what happened with the font thing made it confusing. lol. i was trying to actually make it that font....but i guess it doesn't work on the ...

I like this line a lot! : the fear would lose its file in the employment agency of emotions. it's very interesting and original. Not trite at all, as you ...