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My favourite sort of songs are ones with cryptic, ambiguous messages. The sort that you listen to over and over to try and figure out the underlying meaning E.g. Bohemian ...

The sound of the gunshot rolled off into silence. “That came from up the top,” said Annabelle, eyes wide in fear. “Dad,” said Michael. He swung the door open and ...

Dark woods, monsters, evil spirits. This chapter would have been perfect to build up suspense and convey fear. That should be your main focus when revising this one. Let's talk ...

Have you read The Hunger Games?

Hi Swift Shadow. Here's a few general tips I think will help round out this chapter. Firstly, description. Seing as this is set on a different planet, this is even ...

This is very short, so not much can be said. Before killing a character off, it's best to make the reader love or hate that character so that they'll care. ...

It's great how you give enough information to keep the reader from being confused, whilst withholding enough to keep the suspense up. I like how there's a question in my ...

Thanks Alec for your advice. It's heartening to know that the suspense is building. It's impossible to tell that myself seing as I know what's going to happen. Need any ...

This is the best book I've ever read, hands down. It made me cry for the first time in 5 years.

Yeah, it's a true story. My mum, dad and I made it up around the campfire while my brother and sister played Nintendo DSs.

One question, about the landslide thing. From another site, I read that it's good to have conflicts not caused by the main villain, such as natural disasters. I don't know ...

I wish I could have seen that. Here's one that happened today. I'm in a Youth Literature program, and today, Isobelle Carmody was speaking. She asked us to write a ...

Michael sat down on the end of his father’s bed. Nigel leant against the pine wall between his and Annabelle’s wardrobes and folded his arms. “I’m not proud of what ...

Sorry to say this, but that chapter bored me - which is why it took so long. There was no conflict. The story looks to be falling into a one ...

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