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Put pegs on everyone else's noses, wear some sort of breathing mask, learn to speak whilst breathing in, distract people from your breath with something that smells worse (a little ...

The video's gone. But I'd like to see it when it comes out. The other 2 Toy Stories were really good as far as I remember, although I haven't seen ...

I haven't read it, but the movie version is one of my favourite movies. I'll be sure to avoid eating plants I find. I don't think I'll be as "wild" ...

Hey there. For this story's shortness, you've sure packed a lot of emotion in :D I could hear the growl of its breaths, and smell the fear of Kayla's heart. ...

10/10. Long, but none of it wasted breath. I particularly enjoyed the part where the guy turned into a fish, and when the other guy randomly solved the riddle with ...

Like Suzanne said, it's hard to judge by these few paragraphs. More to the point than are you a good writer, is are you willing to be a good writer. ...

I didn't find any confusion in the POV switching. It seemed as though you were doing it to make the reader go: "Ah, so that's the same boy except in ...

I can tell by reading this that you have great talent, and have put a lot of work into this. It's not often I read something this good on the ...

This is a good continuation of the story. You showed Carter's nervousness realistically and accurately. Perhaps a little too much, because he doesn't seem very professional letting it show so ...

Let me start with a positive. I loved the character's voice. Using the word "Like" all the time, the way teenagers speak really makes it feel like an authentic teenager ...

Any author who writes a plot driven by an ancient prophecy doesn't deserve to be published. It's a complete cop-out way of justifying what happens in the story. It's as ...

I actually made a blog. The first post is an experimental recipe I made up. It's really strange, but tastes great. And it's here .

which also felt odd. He hadn’t been walking on all fours since he was a baby, but it felt completely normal now; The bits I've underlined cotradict each other. I'm ...

You did a good job of the "hook" with the genocide thing at the end of the chapter, but not revealing anything more. It makes me wonder what's going to ...

It would make it a lot easier to read if you separated it into paragraphs. A big block of text is a little daunting to read. You also need to ...