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I've read some of Karsten's reviews, and they're top quality. Anyone can correct grammar, but Karsten goes into plot, characters, setting, and all of the things that really matter. If ...

This is obviously the homiest looking house on the block, When I first read this I thought it said horniest house. And I thought, what wonderful characterisation. In one line ...

Good job introducing the conflict. So there's a love triangle just cropped up, and she didn't really seem to want to marry John, which makes me wonder why. Its a ...

One of the first things I noticed was how you describe the setting. Not only was it vivid, but it seemed to mirror her emotions. That's a very powerful thing, ...

Oh no, I'm late. Sorry. I guess you could say that I couldn't see your PM through the mountain of exam study surrounding me :x The bar was a dimly ...

It depends a lot on what's happening in the story. Some things are either too dangerous, expensive, or hard to come by to experience them. In what I'm writing now, ...

Michael awoke. The car was off, the music had stopped, and Gaea was gone. Out the front of the car stretched a barren red plain, coated in dry-green Spinifex. A ...

Hi IR. This is better than chapter 2. a room like nothing none other he had ever seen. Double negative. The ground on which he stood was brown, and smooth, ...

Brilliant writing. Crummy formatting. Split up the middle paragraph into two or three paragraphs and it'll be easier to read. It looks like your italics didn't work, so you might ...

White Shadow, you have a doorbell on hour head because your last name's Doorbell. (You're not allowed to make the obvious comeback involving my last name because this thread isn't ...

I ran out of file paper so I got like, 3 metres of paper towel out of the dispenser and glued pencils to each end and rolled it up like ...

Here we go... When Jack was first introduced, it was unclear that he was watching it on TV. I thought he must have been one of the senators until you ...

In maths my teacher was telling me a joke. Why did the Mexican throw his wife off a cliff? I said, "because she stole his taco." He said no. I ...

Couldn't agree more Mashe. Even if it means having to scrape a meagre existence, I wouldn't want any other job.

Wow, this is huge. I'm going to have to do this on the weekend.