HibiscusBlush

Hey There! =) You've conjured up a really great piece here. I'm no poet but I love to reading it and this is creepy yet so lovely. Empty eyes staring ...

Hey Priceless =) This is a great start, very interesting! I think your portrayal of Noor, and all your characters, is realistic and I like all of them. The Beauty ...

Bonjour Twin :P First I’ll say, poetry isn't my forte and I don’t have anything bad to say because I found this sorta . . . . . Amazing! I ...

WoW! Kind of intense!? 'Really great story here, Carly! The beginning, opening with 'gaspy' and panicked sentences, I like. It adds to the intensity of the story, I think. I've ...

Hey Smilin' =) I thought I'd post my review of all three chapters here. So! This is a greaaat story. John's love for his son, his wife, his brother, is ...

How cool is this =) I agree with what Gracie said entirely. It's surreal and sweet and almost fairytale-like. I reeeally like it! There was a struggle, which enticed me ...

After reading this and letting the story settle in my mind a moment, this feeling welled up in me. The only way I can think to describe it is so ...

“We both know only to attempt puns rarely, and when you do, only when they are actually funny ones!” This line made me smile and chuckle, ahee! =) Overall, I ...

I reeeelly like this! =) I thought you emphasizeed key points of the characters looks and personalities that brought a great sense of realism, which made it fun and cute ...