HeatherCrawford

Good stuff, Palip! Makes me want to read more! However, here’s some things I noticed: Like most of the other reviewers, I wanted to know more about where he is ...

This story uses lyrics from a beautiful early seventies Motown song: Smokey Robinson & the Miracles' I Can't Stand To See You Cry. Check it out if you like this! ...

I don't know why, but I feel as if the word "endearing" isn't the right word. Make Peter do something, like "hugging her from impulse", or use another word. I ...

I like it! I liked that you did not put too much focus on the drugs, as that’s probably what most other people would do, turn the drug problem into ...

Hmmm… I don’t think this seems like a good ending because from the point when you write about I didn’t plan for this The tiny white strip I didn’t plan ...

Here's part three of Peter. I suggest you read part I and II first! Hope you like it! I stopped outside of the conservatory and lit a cigarette. The first ...

Cool, cool story! I like the end to it. I think open ends make a good impression because they leave the reader with something to think about. Also, some swearing ...

I pretty much liked this, as it was something you don’t get to read so often. Reminded me a bit of the Lady and the Tramp. :) And due to ...

Thanks so much, Nike! I feel so honored, as this is my first story (and first comment) on YWS! I've split it up into three parts now, so thanks for ...

Check out Part I first (if you haven't already done so)! Hope you like it! The hall was empty as I entered the conservatory but for four people standing by ...

Pretty good work! At first as a reader you think, it’s a couple living in the city, then you think, ahhah, the couple is separated, then you get a little ...

I liked this because it somehow reminded me of the West Side Story: the creepy, dark scenery and the Hispanic characters. One thing you have to alter: the dates of ...

This is a cute little story! I also like it because it reminds us that it we mustn’t take it for granted to always have our family around, and we ...

Thirteen years??? Man, you wrote a really profound story! It's funny, it's not like this is something that has never been written about before, but we like to read about ...

Good work! I liked Bree, she seems pretty sympathetic. But what I thought was rushed about the ending was the way that Bree could in such a short time, after ...