HaydenMacaw

yes, the last line is suppose to be ironic Sad faces are sad They spoil pages They ruin emails They are the root of All evil When you Type Make ...

Great poem; it was very enjoyable to read. I particularly enjoyed the last stanza. Alot of the poems I have been reading have last stanzas that divert to much from ...

Hey JackRussel, I really enjoyed your poem; it superbly conveyed dismay, your targeted emotion. I think it has the potential to be much more evokative, though. This is just a ...

Great poem! I particularly enjoyed the imagery you use. You have some really killer lines, particularly the last line of each of the stanzas. For example, I loved the lines: ...

I'm glad you have such strong faith! It wasn't preachy at all, it was beautiful. Your imagery, flow, pacing, was all flawless. I'll say it again, its an absolutley beautiful ...

I know I already critiqued, but I have one additional comment--any confusion concerning the line: Has been is will be could be fixed with italizes, so the it looks like: ...

I like the duality in this poem, it is excellent--particularly in the lines: cut by fate and tied by destiny. Also in the line: Has been is will be Normally ...

Numbers on a page Each number is a heartbeat Each heartbeat fuels a mind Each mind makes choices Each choice changes the world Numbers on a page Each number is ...

(This is kind of experimental, so let me know what you think...) 1,000 lilies Red. White. Blue. Purple. Red. A cat ate a purple lily A mouse ate a red ...

Hey, I just wanted to shout my agreement. Write from the heart, take comments with a grain of salt and use them to make your writing better. Writing is all ...

I love your attitude! Being able to convey positivity is a rare and preciolus talent. I feel like sometimes people get caught up in the "power" of darkness and negativity. ...

Welcome to YWS. The great thing about this site is that it is a safe, great enviorment. If your not feelng particularly inspired, feel free to browse around and review ...

Hi there I am here Sitting with my legs crossed Elbows on my knees Chin on my hand My mouth is closed My ears are open I smile and nod ...

It is raining Steady and consistent I am alone Safe and consistent It is dry where the people are But it is loud where the people are So I sit ...

First off, I am naturally predisposed to love this poem because I alway love poems written in couplets. That being said, your poem is no exception. I particularly enjoyed the ...