Hawkie

This was good. Like the other reviewer, I liked the informality. You could probably do away with some of the bigger words and make it even more informal. Your grammar ...

Hi! I'm Hawkie and I'll be reviewing you today. You know what? I don't like your first sentence. First sentences should be interesting. They should tell us something about what's ...

Hi, I'm Hawkie. Enjoy this nitpicky review! Red letters are grammatical corrections, and blue letters are my comments. The sun was just beginning to set as I was walking home. ...

Hi! I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. This needs some work. I think it has potential (everything does), but yeah, you need to fix it up quite a ...

Hi. I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. In my opinion, your writing needs some fattening up. The "diary format" can be dangerous because it runs the risk of ...

Hi! I'm Hawkie, and I'll be your reviewer today. You have an interesting premise here. There are a lot of teen rehab stories, but if you make the plot your ...

Hi again. =) This is good. Very moving. Just a few nitpicky things - He must have looked like a mad man "Madman" is actually one word . . . ...

Well! This was very short . . . but interesting. ^^ Next time, post more, okay? That way people will have more to review. “I will be back,” I shouted ...

Hi. :) I enjoyed reading your story. The red letters are where I've fixed grammar/spelling, and the bold are my personal comments. You forget periods in several places - I've ...

Like Loveless said - change it to black! Colored fonts are distracting. The red font marks the stuff that I've changed. The bold letters are my own notes. She stood ...

This is very good. I just noticed it was under Non-Fiction and that makes it even especially sad - I'm sorry this happened. i. Grammatical stuff Garrett Rogers is probably ...

Hi! I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. I love Warriors. :) Kittypets weren't respected by the Clans. Anyone who's read the books knows this already, so it's not ...

Awwww, this is so sweet. A lot of "complicated grown-up stuff" has happened in my family lately so it hits close to home. He has bright red hair, and I’ve ...

Hi there! I liked the next installment of your story. At the end of the school day, Julie spotted Anthony. "Uh, sorry about this morning. Didn't mean to interrupt your ...

Hi there! I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. The red letters are the things I've corrected, and the bold letters are my comments. Elise stood before the full-length ...