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Re: Trapped Underwater
Thank you, Jet. I totally agree with the comments you've made and I can see your confusion. I wrote this last year and I definitely knew there were plenty of ...
Jan 21, 2011 -
Re: The isolated
Hey, I agree that you might want to be more specific and ask yourself, why, why is this happening and what is going on? I too have trouble with getting ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Summer Barbeque *no edit*
Hey, I really think you could do more with this poem, but for what you have written, it was pretty funny. I know you mentioned that you wrote it fast, ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Do you imagine dreams?
I love the thought of your poem and the ideas you worked in. My only thoughts are, you might be able to add your question into the poem some how ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Trapped Underwater
Sometimes life can feel as though you are trapped underwater, but I believed, no matter what it takes, there are always ways to swim to the top. However, sometimes getting ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Trapped Underwater
Oh, thanks you guys :) Elizabeth, I'll have to fix this, thank you.
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: A collection of poems
Untitled My angry thoughts are left to ferment. My patience is waning as fury manifests its self (itself?) Lies lingering on the tip of my tongue Waiting to escape this ...
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: Drown- Prologue
Hey, I thought this was very well written. I loved how you started off with a song and left everyone wondering. Awesome :). I think you should continue writing and ...
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: Depression
Wow, this is a good poem with very strong emotion! I love the way you talked from two different perspectives, but kept the same poem. Very well done. :)
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: Trapped Underwater
(Here is a This I Believe. A this I believe is a mini essay in which someone writes about things they believe in and why they believe in it. Awesome ...
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: KD's Color Edited Photos 2
Hey KD, Wow, I really like what you did with the original by making it brighter. It looks so much better. Nice job :smt004
Jun 29, 2010 -
Re: Is It Wrong?
If you can write poetry that fast than maybe it is great. Depending on what you are writing, every piece takes a different amount of time. It is not wrong ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: The Top Shelf
I am riveted by the thin lines of blood that trails down your arms You scream you scream, 'God help me!' I am riveted by the thin lines of blood ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: Things I Carry Inside Me
Well, thanks everyone for the help. :D
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: Things I Carry Inside Me
Okay well, here is version number 2 :) I carry the good and the bad of things around me. the thoughts that pass by and the words that were left ...
Jun 28, 2010
