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  • Poetry » Other, Dramatic
    Re: From, someone in denial

    They can't fix it by writing a letter that says "no we didn't hurt you we just loved you what are you talking about". I am especially intrigued by the ...

    Mar 29, 2024

  • Poetry » Spiritual, General
    Re: ​Day One Hundred and Twenty One Thousand

    Yes, yes, yes. This is going somewhere and is almost there. I love the images you choose to focus on: the milk and honey oozing from the cracks, the shine ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: hunter-gatherer

    Hello, Spatula. Your title and description drew me in. Your ideas are keeping me here. I'd really like to see this poem worked further, and here are aspects I think ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Song

    You mention that the meaning of this poem is left up to the reader, so I'll tell you what it means to me. It means that I feel like I'm ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: daily task lists

    Hmm. I really love the format and idea of this poem, but something is bothering me about the formatting of the sentences in between. If I take them into one ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: hold my hand

    Hmm, this is a really interesting image. First of all, your poem starts out very strong. I love the description of how you felt in summer -- I feel strong ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » General, Action / Adventure
    Re: the road of memories

    Oh my goodness, I loved this part the most: The air is sleepy "alright everyone up." The air is excited "shh!" The air is sleepy -- that is exactly the ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Art » Narrative, Romantic
    Re: Autumn Flame

    Hello there! I was pleasantly surprised by how accessible this piece was. I was hooked by the line "Something in me was finally ready for the end of the story" ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Article / Essay » Culture, Literature
    Re: The Origins of Buddhism

    Hello! I'm going to share a few pieces of feedback about this essay, and I hope they will be helpful to you. First, what is the main idea of the ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Swashbucklers (Prologue)

    Hello! I'm going to leave a few of my first thoughts after reading this prologue. First, I really like the setting and some of the feeling that courses through this ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Spiritual
    Re: Away

    Hello! I'll leave a quick review on what I felt while reading your poem. First, I am definitely into the basic premise of this poem. You want me to feel ...

    Oct 28, 2022

  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Dramatic
    Re: The Raven King/Barely Audible

    I am 100 percent with you until "transparent works of art', because after that, you suddenly turn from the speaker telling the sister a story, to the sister somehow knowing ...

    Jan 30, 2021

  • Poetry » Technology, General
    Re: l|ll|barcode wishl|ll|sonatal|ll|

    do robots c color do they know suns shine thru nights only we don't @ em This is my favorite part. I love the palette, and I love how in ...

    Jan 30, 2021

  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic
    Re: Ode to a Potato

    It feels like there are two worlds here that you are teetering between. There is the simple, campy ode to an actual potato, where you'd use even more simple vocabulary ...

    Jan 30, 2021

  • Poetry » Other, Literature
    Re: i am a free verse poem

    I really love the introduction of this poem. It pulls me in from the very first line -- I have subconsciously thought of myself this way, but never phrased it ...

    Jan 30, 2021


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