Young Writers Society

Yes, yes, yes. This is going somewhere and is almost there. I love the images you choose to focus on: the milk and honey oozing from the cracks, the shine ...

Hello, Spatula. Your title and description drew me in. Your ideas are keeping me here. I'd really like to see this poem worked further, and here are aspects I think ...

You mention that the meaning of this poem is left up to the reader, so I'll tell you what it means to me. It means that I feel like I'm ...

Hmm. I really love the format and idea of this poem, but something is bothering me about the formatting of the sentences in between. If I take them into one ...

Hmm, this is a really interesting image. First of all, your poem starts out very strong. I love the description of how you felt in summer -- I feel strong ...

Oh my goodness, I loved this part the most: The air is sleepy "alright everyone up." The air is excited "shh!" The air is sleepy -- that is exactly the ...

Hello there! I was pleasantly surprised by how accessible this piece was. I was hooked by the line "Something in me was finally ready for the end of the story" ...

Hello! I'm going to share a few pieces of feedback about this essay, and I hope they will be helpful to you. First, what is the main idea of the ...

Hello! I'm going to leave a few of my first thoughts after reading this prologue. First, I really like the setting and some of the feeling that courses through this ...

Hello! I'll leave a quick review on what I felt while reading your poem. First, I am definitely into the basic premise of this poem. You want me to feel ...

I am 100 percent with you until "transparent works of art', because after that, you suddenly turn from the speaker telling the sister a story, to the sister somehow knowing ...

do robots c color do they know suns shine thru nights only we don't @ em This is my favorite part. I love the palette, and I love how in ...

It feels like there are two worlds here that you are teetering between. There is the simple, campy ode to an actual potato, where you'd use even more simple vocabulary ...

I really love the introduction of this poem. It pulls me in from the very first line -- I have subconsciously thought of myself this way, but never phrased it ...

I am really impressed with the last two lines of this poem. The second to last line is what we hope with all poems. That we have all felt the ...