Hannah

:D Hey, hey, hey, welcome! Don't forget to review some other pieces on the site as well! Reviewing someone's work and finding out what is good and bad about it ...

Hi! I love Spirited Away, so I thought I'd stop in and see this. Her arm is definitely a bit skinny. Okay, more than a bit, it looks almost like ...

Hey, Lord Anzius. Nice to see you! Let's get right down to it. I am reluctant to give any real advice because these lyrics are about insanity. The music could ...

Hi, Becki! This piece definitely needs extension. It ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering why we read what we did. Is something else going to happen? Figure out why ...

Hello! Just a quick tip before my review: If you have a longer piece like this, try breaking it up into two parts if you can. A lot of people ...

Hey, Stori. So I don't exactly know what this is supposed to be for, because it's under 'other', but I'm going to try to give you advice as best I ...

This is the piece I really wanted to take a look at. First of all, the title is really weird. Okay, most of this poem is really weird. But that ...

Hey, man! :D How've you been? I saw that you were talking about reviewing works with zero reviews and I saw that your submissions hadn't gotten any reviews since yesterday, ...

Yeah, I would say that including the song might not be necessary. It might fit with what you're attempting, but what you're attempting doesn't lose anything by taking out the ...

D: Okay. So. Well. Was this an assignment or something? It seems very pointed and very message-y. Even if you want it to be message-y, it can be that way ...

Hello, Auteur. I'm Hannah and I'll give you a few tips that I've learned from writing school essays. The first thing you should do is look through the essay and ...

Hello, Kayla! Welcome to YWS! Be sure that you go and review works from other members before posting any more works of your own, okay? If you review other members, ...

Hey, Layla! The idea behind this poem is really sweet, and I can tell that it means a lot to you, or you wouldn't be writing about it. I do ...

Hey, Sureal. So, I'm assuming this is part of something that will have more than one part, and that's good, because it leaves me wanting those other parts. Right now, ...

It feels incomplete and rushed. ... The end result, then, is limp. ... but none of them felt original, it came across as quite generic. ... we didn't end up ...