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Re: The YWLJ 2010 Volume: On Sale Now!
Do they have information about the site on the inside? Would they be useful to purchase and distribute as advertising in this way? I guess I've never seen a literary ...
Mar 25, 2010 -
Re: Jumping
Hello, Aristotle! So, this a nice little piece. It's silly, so there's not much to review concerning the message, but I still think you could fix it up a little ...
Mar 24, 2010 -
Re: Traveling Soldier Short Write
Hey, Kitkat! First, before you do anything else, click on the dancing pink elephant and learn how to punctuate dialogue. No, seriously. Click on it. :elephant: Secondly, I want to ...
Mar 24, 2010 -
Re: You've Changed
First of all, if you want to break up, do it. I know it's not place for relationship advice, but if you honestly don't want to be with someone, it ...
Mar 23, 2010 -
Re: I loved, Not love
Hello! How often have you written poetry? Let's see if we can't get you into a different style. First of all, I'm going to challenge you to write a poetry ...
Mar 23, 2010 -
Re: Quatrains and Couplets
Hey, I have a few bits to mention on your couplets. :3 1) The sun has risen, it is now dawn, the moon is playing as the morning's pawn. I ...
Mar 23, 2010 -
Re: Rydia's Reviews
-is mesmerized by your pretty row of badges- Would you mind helping me try to pinpoint the discomfort everyone feels with the sailor's thoughts in this poem? And anything else ...
Mar 22, 2010 -
Re: You Know You Want Some [re-opened]
Demeter! Thank you so much for the comments on 'He Stood'. I am looking in to why everyone thinks those parts are choppy, and it's also really valuable to me ...
Mar 22, 2010 -
Re: Them Blinking Critiques
Hi, Blink! Would you mind dropping an opinion on this? :D
Mar 22, 2010 -
Re: Sulphur
Hello, Kamas. You say you're not good at poetry and I think that's a load of feathers! -angry glare- Here's the feeling that I have after reading through this a ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: He Stood
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Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: a lesson for this sunday
Do you live for the summer? I remember some of your summer poetry from last year, Kylan, and you SHINE here. I believe that last year I also cautioned us ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: Overexaggeration versus Subjective Reality
"The ticking of the clock sounded like dynamite and rumbled through my body with every stroke." "The cars whizzed by me, drag-racing, it seemed, as I walked along the lonely ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: Forgiving but Stupid
Haha, because as much as people hate to admit it, we form intense connections with one another and can adapt to pain or disappointment as long as it gets us ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: How Do You...
Hello! Welcome to YWS~ Be sure to look around at works from other members and lend them your suggestions, too. Looking through what could be improved in other works helps ...
Mar 21, 2010
