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I liked the idea of this fifth poem, but it didn't make me feel what I thought it should make me feel. I saw so many sad words 'rape, sadness, ...

CLO, IT'S CLO. IT'S CLO~~~ Hi, Clo. I love you. Okay, so the first stanza of Jarring left me thoroughly delighted, but I guess it set the bar too high ...

Hi, Kylan. along the way I felt like this phrase was too mundane, perhaps something put there because you couldn't think of any better way to describe 'the way'? I ...

Hey, Navita! ^_^ I really liked Tiempo, especially these lines: Time, the scrawny twilight child begs to drain the stars away of yellow, tinged with hurt and pink splatter upon ...

I keep thinking I don't like five, but then I like all the parts of five, especially you will have seen the broken body of the breeze. D: BUT I ...

April 5th, 2010; Just The Babiest Fragments of Notes I drive the tuningman mad, stretching and contracting, even with the subtle heat of his breath in a sigh of content, ...

I agree with Navita! They're not awful by any means. I love the second one especially, because I think it's stronger, and I appreciate that you have a twist of ...

Hi, Tori! There's one line I really like in all of these poems: Because when we're old and cranky And we're about to die It won't matter that I ever ...

Hey, Elinor! There's one thing I recommend for you to experiment with during NaPo, and that's poetic language. Try using some similes or metaphors to enhance your descriptions, or make ...

I think that this haiku could benefit from a topic. I guess it's hard to say 'edit your haiku', because it's easier to throw them away, so maybe I'll just ...

Hi, again, Navita! Si tu veut, je peux par... no, I give up. My French is too rusty, especially my written French. Haha, and now I'm excited to read some ...

April 4th, 2010; In secret spaces, She might relax She wants to wear blue and red and white but not together, because patriotism is a sin. she wants to let ...

I've been going through the poetry articles in the knowledge base, and I found that some of them take a really long time to say something simple, which means few ...

Hehe, I like your Haiku. It was happy and simple, but I didn't know how the eggs could hide and roll at the same time. One of the things I ...

Hi, Bubblewrapped! ^_^ I enjoyed the thoughts behind your april first poem, especially as you got to the close, where you added 'This is the spirit of an age: to ...