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Hi, Jenny! Welcome to YWS. I'm glad that your mom convinced you to share your work. It's going to be a really enriching process and I am very sure that ...

Hey, Flumicakes. This was a nice piece, but not very memorable. It seemed to arrive and pass without leaving a mark, but I feel like it reached out at the ...

Hello! Thank you for posting these pictures. I'm going to make recommendations, but I have no technical knowledge, so you may have to fix some things on your own or ...

Hello! Congratulations on your first poem, my friend. Let me give you a few pointers, though. We all start with poetry like this. I had a notebook full of it ...

Hello, 300! Welcome to YWS. Be sure to get out there and review! Well, let's take a look at your story. Ignoring grammar or style, the plot seems to be ...

Hello, Classy. After reading this through once, this is what I want: I want to see the relationship (that doesn't mean romantic relationship) between Matty and Kisa more defined. They've ...

I enjoy the second stanza, but nothing in the first. 'sex organ blossoms' is odd, not elegant, though it should be. Petals can stretch and keep with your seductive theme, ...

Hello! Well, let's get right down to it: I didn't like it. I felt that it read like an okay description in a prose piece rather than a poem. It ...

Hallo! Rubber Immortal, Part One I would LOVE if you would review this piece for me. If it interests you and you'd like to read the WHOLE THING, there are ...

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Hello, Kyllorac. Motley was a great word to begin with, but it went south after there. I would ask you to look at the poem and attempt to summarize what ...

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