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Re: Hopes And Fears
Hi, Molly. The first thing I think this poem could benefit from would be a clarification of voice. You're speaking about a "he", then you switch to just speaking about ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: My Confession
So, I was happily surprised. I came here to BEG you to not stifle the words you want to say with a rhyme scheme, but I found that there was ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: Time
I almost skipped over the important part. The transition between his dream and back to reality is the only thing that makes this piece worth reader, because it changes the ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: A Callous Answer
Hey, Sol. I like confusing when I write it. The last couple of pieces of short fiction I posted on here got everyone going "WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON?" ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: Asteroids
Hey, AM! Well, I liked reading it. I didn't find myself having to stop because I got bored, so that's a good sign, and you set everything up really well ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: The First One Is the Worst One
Hey, Jordan. I wanted to point something out to you, and I was able to find something to point it out clearly. Here: and my friend and she sat in ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: Golden
Hey, Lily. I love the images in this. I kind of like the idea of it, but I definitely think it needs a little work, too. After reading it and ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: Forced Rhyme Schemes.
Amen. I see it all the time and feel like a broken record when I make review after review saying, "Hey, trying saying what you mean to say and not ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: The Princesses
Well, of COURSE I'm here for you~ So look at it this way. This poem is about watching the two princesses freeze to death. That can be beautiful. It is, ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: The Memory Shop
Hi, Cailey! So this is cute. I think the most vivid part about it is the setting that you give us. There are times when we can see exactly what ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish [3]
Granted, but now you can never go back to your own accent. I wish I could live in South Korea.
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Goldilocks Day
First of all, this is awesome. This is unique and what's especially great about it is that it's something that we can all connect to in some way. We live ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Um... well HI!!
Hello! Welcome! Haha. I'm Hannah. I can see you've already gotten a couple of reviews down, but just in case you haven't yet figured it out, a comment on a ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: An Adventurer's Faith
Solvy! This is crazy! I wasn't expecting it. (: I'm not from 'here', neither from 'there'. What they call roads is not my place. So, first of all neither should ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Do You Know Me?
That's a really good evaluation of your own writing. Whenever you have a feeling like that, be sure you don't brush it off. I think the reason that this piece ...
Jul 23, 2011
