Hanime

Yeah, i have a bit of a problem with excess commas haha. And I'm neither American or British.. I'm a Kiwi! :shock: :wink:

Burger Rings "Squea-ak. Squea-ak." I gaze bemusedly at the seductively-arrayed supermarket shelves, my nonchalant expression betraying none of the mortification I feel at my rusty, outspoken trolley.

It does need some improvements, but overall I like it :)