HBGirl4ever

Wow, I liked how you stopped right as he was about to read the letter. I like your idea, a place captured by people you take out the creativity. But ...

It's a really interesting story, but I did find quite a few grammar problems. Like I always say, check and edit your work TWICE. I honestly do like the story, ...

Okay, sometimes it seems like you are just talking to use, and the other is that you're reading poetry. There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes. ALWAYS edit and ...

This is an interesting carry on of Alice In Wonderland. I'm a bit confused, though. Does this take place present day, in the past, or in the future? It would ...

I this like this story a lot, actually. But at times, you messed up some sentences. Like, ';helping organizes my thoughts and relaxing me before the big jump' didn't make ...

Wow, that's intense. This story makes me want to know what happens next, as all great books should. I couldn't really find any major grammar or spelling mistakes. But I ...

I like this chapter, because you meet a lot of new and interesting characters, who all seem to have a mysterious or interesting past. The story has a lot of ...

I actually really liked this. The suspense was very well planned out, especially once your wondering who the old man's murderer was. At times, there was some misspelling, and you ...

Okay, so I don't have much time to do a full scale review sadly, but I'll highlight it. Your spelling and grammar were a bit off most of the time, ...

This story is exciting, and the end of the chapter leaves you craving for more. But I know for a fact that people who work at nurseries would do more ...