Gwenevire

Thanks :D Next time we see each-other we can do that! Is the writing really good? I might consider studying them myself. To add a little more to my writing ...

Not all of it has to rhyme just little bits. If you want I don't have to review your work if it makes you so mad. I was just trying ...

I though I had already gone through this with you. You must separate it into paragraphs. Its hurts to look at it like this!

Yay! You put it up :D Nice work! I helped you! Don't forget that!

Thank you so much Ayra! I will be sure to do that as soon as I get a sec XD I know this is out of the topic but aren't ...

Thanks! :D I get what you mean about run on. I felt that when I was righting it. But I guess I could add a few commas or periods in ...

Thank you for the help :D I will be sure to do that! Thanks

Nice work. But its a bit to descriptive and I noticed that you described the same things more than once. Remember Wisdom begins in wonder Please post your revised one ...

Wow. That was beautiful... I love it! Nice work! :D

wow... Thats really helping me feel it.! Thank you so much. Your advise is so true and as soon as I get back home I shall listen to the song ...

Thanks you two and both your opinions are good! I will keep on working on it! :wink:

I really like this. Though, maybe you could make it longer. Right now I picture it going on more. Keep going! Genevieve xxx

I really like this! I doesn't make much sense but I still really like it. I love your ending! Blind, deaf and dumb. Yay! GOOD WORK! Genevieve xxx

Well you need to work on capitalization... It good but we know nothing about who looks like what and where this person is and what he thinks... This is a ...

Well you should add a few more lines of description to it and maybe make it a little easier to read. Its hard to feel for either of the characters. ...