Gwenevire

4/10 I can't really see it and it lacks color.

Thanks Camille. Your so helpfull! Really! And I am the complete opposite. I will make my corrections right away! Thanks!

Good work I am not going to quote anything. But I seem to be missing out on my usually dose of description from you. I know that others say its ...

Yay it up! First off. I like your description. But what about more of her surroundings. I am finding it slightly hard to picture this. So she has fallen asleep? ...

Thanks Kepe. I think I might put the boom in italics as if she is thinking it. Thanks for all your help. I will have chapter 3 up soon! I ...

I just finished reading this amazing book for the second time. Its a teen novel I know, its fluff. I know. But sometimes its good to read things like that. ...

If you havent read the first chapter :arrow: And here is the third chapter :arrow: I stepped through the rusty green doors and into the city. It was gloomy and ...

Hello Porcelain Angel. I am Gwenevire but every one seems to call me Gwen. So. What do you like to write about? Do you have any pets? What are your ...

Thank you Charlie last night I started to write chapter 2 with what you suggested. Surroundings and the voices. Now that I am clear on it all I will start ...

Cool! Tazzar gives rat kissies as well! Tazzar has a black head and a black stripe going down his back. He has pink was and a black chest. The rest ...

This is an emotion poem I can tell. When you just want to let everything out. Not the best type of poetry. I agree with Cade and Rjjr_vectra. You talkin' ...

Hey welcome! I am Gwen. I am kinda known as one of the odd people in my school as well. But I like it :) I have to break this ...

10/10 I know I don't like it as much to... bland :lol: Here comes another one.

10/10 Totally. I will keep this one in the considering pile. I still have more. Thanks for your help :)

10/10 Thats what I thought as well. Here is another one.