Gwenevire

ello 1) Its kinda out of focus but your cat's cute. 2) Its kinda fuzzy, do you have macro mode on your camera? That's what is good for eyes. 3) ...

“But darling-“ I slammed the rusting door behind; flinching as it banged shut. My legs hurried body over the yellowing lawn and onto the gum stained sidewalks. I snarled angrily ...

lol thanks :)

6/10 I don't know what it is, its kinda hard to see and I don't think you took it :(

The glow of the early morning sun streamed through the small openings of the bushy trees that lined the clouded skies. Small shadows of spiked leaves where cast over the ...

You say they are foster sisters, but you need to show it, through the way they act together... Can you see that they have a strong bond etc. I don't ...

Thank you all :) Camille I will make the edits right away :)

ello. It depends on how well you adapt things, say you wanted to write about driving, well you can watch your parent or older brothers/sisters do it, then you can ...

Yay! *jumps around* Pepsi? I will have some. Good work everyone, Gweny :wink:

ello Zilly here is my promised crit. The smooth glass was cool against my cheek and my steamy breath was melting the crystals that stuck to the window. I would ...

ello Books, I am Gwen, feel free to call me what you wish. Unless its like stupid :lol: YWS is a great place to be, so have fun. I am ...

Thanks a tone! I will fix those right now :D What do you think of it now? I will PM you about friday :) love ya, Gweny xox

Yup =] Well, its bad enough our characters already have the same names, maybe you could make it Lyla... That would really help if you could. But we will still ...

Thanks :) I have done a little bit of polishing, it would be great if you could go over it again and give me a heads up on my progress/failure ...

ello darling :) The world seemed to be holding its breath I kind of find that hard to read, the world ain't breathing... So why would it hold its breath. ...