GwendolenGodsmack

Er, I don't know about that ending. It sort of implies that despair is something that just goes away, leaving clean flesh with no evidence of the wound. In my ...

Guess I should have clarified...oops. This IS in fact a rough draft, something I found when sifting through some old journals. Thanks for the advice!

Well then! I think it was- I cringe as I say it- very twi-lighty. Don't get me wrong, your poem was very good and had lots of excellent moments, but ...

melancholy fire like an icy claw clawing at the heart, soul of humanity loses faith are we all violence and hate and greed? Hope has died. Killed by the bleeding ...

I really liked this poem. There was alot of emotion thick inside of it, and I could feel the gulrt and fear rising off you. My particular favorite stanza was: ...

I liked this poem for the emotion, but try not to repeat words. Often in a poem or a work of fiction you use repetition as a literary device, but ...

It seems like this poem was more suited to being IN your book rather than by itself. If you have to explain about it like you did, than you probably ...

I feel alone. They're shouting again Maybe I can Escape? No. -I hear it everywhere There's a vice sitting on my chest like an unbearable weight like my heart would ...