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Re: Kidnapped, Revised
Okay, first of all -- as everyone says, this really, really, really needs paragraphs! Secondly, is this supposed to be true? It sounds really forced, and I don't know if ...
Jun 13, 2012 -
Re: Nightfall~ Chapter 1: Love Isn't To Be Trusted
I liked this a lot! :) VERY well done -- and I don't remember noticing any spelling errors :) “Me?” She chuckles and Fox’s mouth increases to a smile. “I ...
May 30, 2012 -
Re: dreamwalkerr
I liked this and the flow went really well. First of all, I'd say that you should capitalize the beginning of each new line :) I didn't see any spelling ...
May 29, 2012 -
Re: thunder
This was very well done! I liked the flow of it, but I suggest that you put a capital letter at the beginning of each new line. This was my ...
May 29, 2012 -
Re: Light & Dark
I'd like to say I really liked this, but there were some spelling errors and simple mistakes: "Catching her BREATHE" should have been, "Catching her BREATH" "The words of his ...
May 29, 2012 -
Re: The Perfect Day
I liked this -- a lot! :) There was a spelling error, such as: "Exitement" it is really spelled "Excitement" But this was a really good story, and you put ...
May 29, 2012