GryphonFledgling

I liked it. The subject matter is something that has been done a million times, but you still managed to make it likable. Very nice. I'm a little confused as ...

*sigh* So true, so true. However, I'm not so sure that "pass" would be the right word for the last line. It seems to me that with such false cheeriness, ...

I agree that this is not formatted like a poem, but if you were to edit that, I can see this being a great piece of work.Very nice descriptions. Just ...

Wow. Seriously. Wow. This was fantastic. The song, the religious references scattered about, the descriptions. Geez. I want to grow up and write like you. And you're younger than I ...

This was a really interesting poem. There were so many different elements to it and they all tied together so nicely. It confused me occasionally, but overall, I found it ...

You have nice writing here and your descriptions are masterful, but the story gets a little lost in them. You write like I write, with a great deal of lovely ...

Hm, interesting stuff. I would love to know where Penelope got her training. I mean, knife throwing isn't exactly a normal hobby. If we were going into weapons training, knowing ...

I love the imagery in this piece, but the line breaks in the first and second stanzas really threw me off. They seem to be in the strangest places and ...

I liked the first stanza and the imagery that you had in there. But the rest of the poem doesn't have that. Maybe if you wove some more imagery about ...

I'll admit I am seriously confused. If it is messed up, rather than post it, I would recommend that you go back and fix it. As is, I have no ...

Ah yes... The rewrite is much better in fixing the issues mentioned above it. *thumbs up* Very nice. I'm a little confused as to who is the POV character though. ...

Hrm... Still trying to figure it out, but taking it literally --> a boy is messing with a set of collector dolls? At first I thought it was a guy ...

I'm a bit confused. So... the sun is going to come up and kill them all? The descriptions here blew my mind. Seriously, you have some major talent. I am ...

"Trickster's Choice" was actually my introduction to Tamora Pierce. I loved them, despite having to figure out the history. I also do like the Lioness books, but I haven't read ...

I remember these books. I read them when I was a bit younger, but after I couldn't find one of the books in the series for over a year, I ...