GryphonFledgling

Oh, so much better. We still get the sort of creepy inspector vibe, wondering what the heck is going on in this weird situation, but it moves along at a ...

Ooh, the description and characterization was much better here! The fight scenes were fun to read and folks talking to one another! Joy! Rapture! Definitely a marked improvement from the ...

Continuing on! We chatted as we walked, and I began to tease Sarah playfully. We laughed and joked as we walked, trying to trip one another, while the twins began ...

Until then, I didn't even know they existed. Then how does he know what to call them? Why isn't he a little more shocked, asking how they looked alike and ...

Unfortunately, this meant she rarely got fresh food, and had to evade malnourishment only with the help of dried fruit. So why doesn't Duncan bust out those handy-dandy rabbit-hunting skills ...

Hey-oh! Suddenly, I made the realization that I was not awakening in the same place I had fallen, and panic began to set in. So wordy! Pare it down a ...

Here again. Again might be playing the part of a broken record. Plowing ahead anyway. Waking up and remembering that I had almost nothing, that all of my possessions and ...

Hey-oh! I've seen your later chapters around and I can't review them 'til I've read the beginning, so I figured I'd leave a review while I'm here! Haven't read any ...

Gonna be a bit of a broken record a few times here, but I gots a review for you! I’ll write her a delicately worded, heart-breakingly sincere apology note. Later. ...

Hey-oh! and hated myself for loosing "Losing" Five days later, we were getting along. So what happened in the five days when they weren't getting along? Were they sleeping together ...

Dun dun duuunnnn... I wasn't as hooked by this chapter as the last one. While the spirit (?) thing was interesting and I want to know what's going to happen ...

Well, hello there! and ground his bones "Grind" his bones. Verb tense was a little wonky there. I wrenched hi m off the beast Mmmkay, so I really liked this. ...

Why, hello there! First off, and mostly unrelated to the story, I love those pictures you have here. They're so lovely and moody. Very atmospheric. Now, onto the review! Mmm, ...

This was weird. But... I really liked it. It was quirky and strange and it really caught my attention. The lack of capitalization in the second half was kind of ...

Hey-oh! I'm here to review! Zomigosh, long chapter. So much happens here! I'm not all that opposed to long chapters, but it seems like things just sort of skip from ...