GryphonFledgling

Oh. My. Goodness. I don't know what I was expecting when I started reading, but it certainly wasn't this. Simply fantastic. A quick question: what is it that he is ...

Omigosh! *spaz* Must. Review. Nao. Is Kerani on guard duty outside her parents' door or is she eavesdropping? I was unclear as to why she was there. If she's on ...

Seems most of the nitpicks have been pretty well-explored, so I'll stick with general impressions. 1) Character - Your character feels very... blah. All we know about her is that ...

Hey-oh! I was actually really interested in your characters. Alex's schtick "student who the teachers hate" has been done a million times before, but I liked his outlook on life ...

I tightened my ponytail to make a point. Can I just say that this is my single most favorite edit you did? It gives character, adds immediacy and gets rid ...

Hah, I was trying to figure out why the review window looked different...

Yayz all around! Actually I really missed the Review Ratio and actually having to earn our points for something (besides Gifts, which are, in fact, awesome).

Hey-oh! Not so much the nitpicks will I give. More general impressions will I focus on. (And no more like Yoda will I speak.) 1) Exposition! It's the beginning of ...

Just one more way that YWS > the rest of the interwebz.

Hey there! Your world-building was nice, but to be honest, I had a hard time really getting into it. There were no characters for me to cling to or a ...

I have a question: How many of you, upon opening up a book, read only the first line before deciding to read it? Recently, I've read quite a few articles ...

*licks*

Can't say I've ever listened to Flyleaf, but you have me intrigued. Investigation is in order, I believe. Story-wise, I liked this. It was an interesting take on Christianity and ...

Hey-oh! Okay, really quickly, the formatting in this chapter is wonky. I can see that you have divided it up into paragraphs, but the way YWS put it in resulted ...

This was interesting. I was sucked in from the beginning and intrigued the whole way through. The second person narration bugged me occasionally. Sometimes it was fine, other times it ...