GryphonFledgling

Very awesome.

I tend to read first, then go through and go block by block, pointing out issues as I see them. I rarely do grammar issues anymore, unless no one else ...

My two little siblings are going as pirates, so I'm either going as a pirate to join the crew or a ninja so that we can stage mock battles all ...

Nice. I'm intrigued. The description and explanations were nice, but just as a warning, too much of it can come across as unpleasant infodumping. You don't have too much of ...

This. Just this.

'Allo, 'allo! I liked this little scene, but I do think that as a story, it needs a little more. If nothing else, just a bit more information about what's ...

There've been threads for past NaNo years, but in the interest of minimizing forum trawling, here's a fresh one for this year! Post your username for and find all your ...

From an outsider's perspective, they probably are confused by why yoha_ahoy would write a thread in 2006 about NaNo in 2010. XD *amused* We're psychic here at YWS.

a grand staircase. They were made out of the rich oak I'm assuming by "they", you mean the stairs. But you've only talked about a singular staircase as of yet. ...

So I'm assuming her dad knows about her abilites? How does he know? Did she tell him? Does he treat her differently because of it? How does he treat her, ...

I love the potential in this story. I love the way your character instantly brands her father as evil. I love how matter-of-fact she is throughout her narration. It is ...

All right, love, I'm confused now. It bounces its face against the lip of the first step Make it clear that you're talking about the tire here. There's no mention ...

Pink's done the nitpicky stuff. On to some big-picture observations! I was a bit confused about the setting here. It seems like it's normal, then it has an animate tire, ...

Done with the day's obligations now, so shootin' for five.

*whoot* Might actually be able to do this one!