GryphonFledgling

Ooooh, shiiiny. Erm, I'm going to have to second and third Stella and Snoink that this beginning seems to go by really quickly. A lot of questions are raised and ...

18. why you don't see zombie ninjas at first it seemed like a good thing no pain more incentive then my arms fell off and moaning about brains equals negative ...

17. mutual you scratch my back I'll scratch yours I won't ask what it was that bit you as long as you don't go looking for my patch of poison ...

Patster for me. I'm working and might be incredibly beat, but I'll try to get at least a few in.

16. cormorant little ring keeps you from biting off too much to chew but little fishes don't fill the void of bigger things missed

15. editing burst of vicious, angry, brilliant slurry scouring every cell, pore and organ from a white-hot skeleton spurting between joints shattering enamel and sucking away marrow leaving just a ...

I would pick up this flier solely for the TVTropes reference. Though, for realzies, this is teh win.

Not really an ad-conscious person, but something that bothered my writerly senses: I would put "under 30" above "looking to improve". As is, it reads like the writer is trying ...

14. tsundere I don't hate you I really don't but you don't need to know that if I tell you you'll get a big head or run away or laugh ...

13. symphony she pinched notes from the air like plucking flower petals or chicken feathers she swallowed them pushing them between her teeth and tongue and down her throat until ...

12. -ism To be or not to be that is the question no one answers. Taken out of context. A line pulled from a silk hat, fluffy and appealing and ...

11. reaper He came like a silent thunderclap. He took her hand and he led her into the sky. She stumbled on the wrinkles of the moon but he caught ...

10. imbroglio I want to spit and rage and fling brilliance about in a froth. Trampling clods of clotted colloquialism and ushering in the harbringers of onopatopoeia and the King's ...

This goes double for first person, where you really have to have a solid voice. (My rule of thumb for PoV is, if the character's voice is unmistakable, and they ...

9. noir sculpt rhythm from metaphor. original song pasted beneath the sirens. silhouette subject to paint too neo-looming. cigarette canvas drunk on harmony.