GryphonFledgling

Gah, these people can not catch a break, can they? He asked me where Uclepidies was Black Swan? She said his heart stopped and that’s why he’s so sick. She ...

Gah, these people can not catch a break, can they? He asked me where Uclepidies was Black Swan? She said his heart stopped and that’s why he’s so sick. She ...

Ooh, dark fairy-tales. Excellent stuff. Sort of graphic and horrifying and I'm glad that Sorea finds them somewhat silly rather than them scarring her for life, but hey, I'm enjoying ...

Hooboy, no punches pulled when it comes to making this family miserable, eh? She called Lin a worthless slut and told her that if she kept whoring with my daddy, ...

Wow. Just... wow. In the best possible way. I don’t know why she is avoiding us. Again with the heavy-handed hint dropping. I mean, yes, she can talk about the ...

Yay for reunions, even if this was a bit of a downer. Daddy's kissing the Black Swan, eh? Again, Sorea doesn't wonder about this at all? Does she understand the ...

Yay for more of the Bastard Princess story! Seconding Jabs in that it sounds very mature here. I mean, the other part did too, but I noticed it more here, ...

Well, hello there! I kind of liked your narrator's voice in this. Snarky and dry. It was quite at odds with the action scene going on and it was an ...

Whoa, this just went from like mildly bad to, like, really, really bad. Reading comments before me, people were mentioning that they wanted to see more emotion, more fear in ...

Erm... I just realized that I never got around to reviewing the other parts after the first. I don't know what happened there. *shame* But I'm here now, so more ...

Ooh, I liked this. At first I was thinking this was a sort of Peter Pan-type scenario (really, I was thinking of the movie Hook ), but as soon as ...

Ooh, this idea intrigues me. A few nitpicky things: The spacing of your punctuation seems to be wonky. I mean, there's like weird spaces all around a lot of words ...

Ooh, the numbers return. To be important? Again, this seems sort of out of the blue. Maybe if she had wondered about the numbers earlier, or she sort of thought ...

Hello again! "Better, but I got only one word: what. Speak in words. I see your thoughts coming in numbers.” Uh, why? Why does Pascale think in numbers? Is this ...

Dude. Your dialogue. *swoons* For real, I did a whole lot of gushing in the last bit and it's going to carry on here. For real, I had like next ...