GryphonFledgling

I went through and edited for punctuation, etc. for you so you can see where you erred. You really seem to like your comma key, but you don't really use ...

Well, everyone else has jumped all over everything I was going to say, so I am left to sweep up what's left. And there isn't much. This was a great ...

7/10 Loving the frames and hat. And the angle is sweet!

12/11/07 070 – Storm THE WASHINGTON POST April 21 GE SOLDIERS TO BE UNLEASHED - Mark Crete Man’s best friend just got a whole lot better. Howland Industry’s Genetic facility ...

When your English teachers says sonnet, this isn't what he means, is it? ;) This was beautiful in a sort of sick way -- I don't know how to describe ...

I really liked this. I'm not much of one for sports stories, but this captured and held my attention admirably. The only thing that bothered me were the italics. They ...

Usual disclaimer: I am not much of a poetry writer and certainly not a critic, but I like to read it. This was really nice. Your imagery was beautiful and ...

It depends on whether or not the meaning of your words will be understood. If you read Lewis Carrol, you can see he came up with a lot of words ...

Interesting work. It reminds me somewhat of the character of Gatsby in "The Great Gatsby." It was mainly the image of the pier and the person standing on it looking ...

Wow. This was extremely powerful. I wasn't quite sure what his 'fiction' was in the beginning: whether it was a book or a movie or something. Then when you mentioned ...

I'll write a disclaimer right now that I myself am not much of a poetry writer and certainly not a critic, but I do like to say what I like ...

I dunno about the critique that Via gave. I'll admit right now that I am not much of a poetry critic, but I liked the places that the lines were ...

This was quite beautiful, with its stark simplicity. I liked it, but I do agree that the last line threw off the balance. It was still a nice poem with ...

*mouth hangs open* This was so gorgeous. I really have nothing to critique, and anything I could have dragged up with a nit comb, Mat beat me in mentioning. Your ...

12/11/07 042 – Triangle No one saw the first red blip on the backpack light. Tom was telling about his wife, who was pregnant back home. At least, she had ...