GryphonFledgling

Hey-oh! I liked the idea behind this, being a sort of psuedo-fairy tale. Quite interesting and a little sad. I would have liked to have seen a little more of ...

It will be done.

Back again! Whoop, we're back to the center alignment again. For realzies, it's hard to read. Strongly suggest that being left-aligned, I do. Wait, wha? We just skipped five months?! ...

Heyup! 'Kay, so RachaelElg already talked about the paragraph spacing, but it bears repeating: space! It breaks up the Text Wall of Doom (tm). But yay for left alignment! I ...

*whoot* A'ighty, review time! First off, two things that are more formatting than anything else, but are hugely important: 1) Space your paragraphs. I can see where they are supposed ...

Hey-oh! Reviewing as promised! I named my diary after you. This kind of threw me for a loop. I mean, I'm pretty sure the girl's name wasn't "Browneyes", so maybe ...

Hello there! Okie-day, so I realize the point of this story was to show how bad his life is and what drove him to drugs and how the drugs affect ...

Hey-oh! I was new to the town of Chultz, and wasn't really looking forward to meeting any new people. Why? This is all the mention we get of this, since ...

Dude. This was gorgeous. It just lilted along, glossy and rich. Seriously, the atmosphere was just so heavy and decadent and distant. Lovely. And they would say, and that, Matthias, ...

I noticed the numbers first thing. First I was like: o_O But then I was like: ^_____^ Nice. Very nice.

This seems to be sort of a free-verse/prose-style poem rather than a short story. Wrong section? Or were the line-breaks intentional for a prose story? I liked this in any ...

Hmm, she's a nasty little bugger, isn't she? I turned back on his helpless corpse A corpse is a dead body. He's still alive here, so maybe just "body"? wraithing ...

D'aww. So sweet. Story-wise, this felt a little... melodramatic. Don't get me wrong, she has every right to be upset and depressed and dedicated to this cause for Rory, but ...

Oh, freakin' amazing. The repetition in this story really got to me. It was just enough to create a really powerful mood, an animalistic mindset, without being overpowering or annoying. ...

If she things that "thinks" Mmm, this was interesting. It was nice to see something outside of Solea's head, even if at first I was kind of confused as to ...