GryphonFledgling

This chapter seemed to be totally disconnected from the last one. I just didn't seem to have the same 'feel' as the last one. This was just more juvenile, if ...

Wow, I liked this. I don't have much time to give you a full review, but I will give it my best shot. Loved your first sentence, I did. I ...

I agree with Majestic Fantasist up there. Your character is ultra-cool commando babe with magic powers, but we really don't know what she is thinking. Who is telling this story? ...

This was an intriguing start. One thing that I noticed is that you seem to start nearly all your sentences with a pronoun - 'it and 'she' ( PARTICULARLY 'she') ...

They may not mean to but they do. I loved this line. It just had the quick step-step pace without being overburdened. Overall, I liked the flow of the poem. ...

I have to echo everyone else on this... The smilies really do not belong there. I think I may have some inkling of what you are trying to say, but ...

The beginning with the figure was confusing, because then you switched from third person to third person. I got lost for a moment. Also, the title confused me at first. ...

I liked this poem. It was short, but it was sing-song and to the point. What point that was exactly, I'm not entirely sure, thought I am guessing paranoia about ...

Thanks for the note. I couldn't figure out why it hadn't shown up on the front page. I knew I had forgotten to rate it, but I didn't connect the ...

Heh, I like the first one better, but that is just the purse. These were beautiful. You have talent. You do fabric very well. I have huge difficulties with the ...

This is the French book, yes? Le Petit Prince? Did you read it in English or French? This was a very nice piece. I liked your language. However, I didn't ...

I had to vote keyboard because that is what I am using for the second draft of my novel, but for most other things, I use a pencil and looseleaf ...

I know this is forever old, but I had to chime in. I hugely disagree with Elelel up there. It does make a difference whether something is a huge mass ...

I tend to not write character bios or questionnaires. I tend to discover my characters as I write the first draft, then by the second draft, I know them well ...

Pretty cool question, but believe it or not, it is actually pretty hard to answer. Or maybe I'm just weird. Most of my stories have begun with a dream. At ...