GryphonFledgling

A sound that was a crossbre e d between a sigh, a snort and a hiccup erupted from the parent’s lips. And that's all I could find... This was a ...

W here was she? She looked around , (comma) trying to figure out where she was . (period) S he glanced over her shoulder to the girl behind her and ...

Why? Why so many depressing poems? This was a nice poem. I think that the rhythm was a bit choppy though. I really couldn't find rhyme or reason to it. ...

Congrats on updating! This chapter was a bit of an info-dump, but you do it through dialogue, which softens the impact quite a bit. Good call. The only thing that ...

Well, everyone did a bunch of editing and caught what I noticed, so I won’t annoy you with repetition. Plus you already fixed most of it. P1 Question: Did you ...

Out of all of them, I like number 3 the best. I agree with Cheeky Coconut that the political situation would need to be tweaked a bit, but overall, I ...

Dang! He's six feet at what? 13? 14? *is jealous* Anyway, this was pretty short, but it was all right. It moved kind of quickly. Maybe you could slow down ...

Congrats on updating! A lot happens in this chapter for how short it is. You kind of seem to rush through it. Maybe you could slow down and describe things ...

Hey, don't worry about the rejection. You wrote a great piece of work here. I really liked this. All of the internal responses and thoughts of the character were great. ...

Thanks to everyone who reviewed. It's nice to know that I am loved. :) In response to the many questions about continuing: this was originally supposed to be a novel, ...

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I have a dilemma. I am writing a novel with two main characters, each with their own story and the two intertwine. My 'problem' is the style I am using ...

I voted for Huntsville for the time being, because I have no good 'other' suggestions for you. I haven't read the story, so I really can't base any suggestions on ...

*sniggers* This was awesome. I wish I was this productive when I was bored. This was quite the masterpiece. I loved all the little terms that the penguins used : ...

Welcome to YWS! Hehe, didn't we all have that urge to rate it 'R'? Just to let out the wild side in us? Anyway, you have come to the right ...