Grizzy

Thanks UncleJimmy!

Hey Denj, thanks for the great review!! The tweaks with my wording you made i think will help the flow a lot! thanks for the advice, and for reading!

Thanks Jai! Those pointers are really helpful! The story was kind of trying to hint that the character being played was like a puppet and didn't know what was going ...

Quick notes before i begin, paragraphing confuses me SO MUCH, and i know its supposed to be at the end of a thought, but it still confuses me. Also I'm ...

Thanks for the pointers! I do agree that the plot isn't super exciting, this was for a school assignment that turned into something i wanted to write more on. I ...

Hi all, thanks for taking time to read this, a few things though first. Please tear it apart! but be gentle :D Also i had a lot of trouble describing ...