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  • Short Story » Realistic, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: unfinished.

    A short story normally does one of two things; presents a full on narrative in a manner shorter than a novel; or simply presents a scene to the audience as ...

    May 8, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Humor
    Re: Conics Unfortunately: 12

    Hello! Kind of coming in without much context, so sorry if I miss some things. One thing that really struck me about the piece was how much world-building you put ...

    May 8, 2017

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: An Unrealistic Illogical Ideologist: The Other Side

    So this tackles the short story format in a very unusual way. The story is told entirely through a monologue; or maybe a dialogue between a person and their internal ...

    May 8, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Trials of a Dragon Knight, Part 1

    I liked this a lot more than I was expecting to. You did a decent job of introducing the audience to the world; not through large chunks of info-dumps, but ...

    May 8, 2017

  • Article / Essay » Narrative, Realistic
    Re: Like a Rolling Stone - The Freewheelin' Bob Dylan

    A lot has been said about Bob Dylan; and a lot will continue to be said about Bob Dylan. He's arguably one of the most iconic musicians of his era ...

    Apr 15, 2017

  • Short Story » Horror, Science Fiction
    Re: The Wolf is Still with Us

    There's an oft-referenced parable said to be originated by the Cherokee people regarding two wolves: One which represents all that is good within man, his capacity for kindness and empathy; ...

    Mar 18, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: prologue

    Hey, I'd love to review this, but there really isn't that much to go by here. I like that you set us up in media res; it starts the reader ...

    Oct 17, 2015

  • Short Story » Health, General
    Re: He tells me stories

    Really like the picture you painted here. It really does its best to show someone who's really gone far off the deep end with their self-image problems. Might I even ...

    Apr 7, 2015

  • Short Story » Dramatic, General
    Re: Therapy Doesn't Work

    First off, I love that little quip at the end. I don't see how the narrator could tell us about a bullet piercing his skull, but that's just minor nitpicking. ...

    Jun 28, 2014

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: With Revisions: The Deal Will Live

    Juxtaposition seems to be the key theme to this story, something that you've might have have picked up on but haven't really built upon. You took the time to set ...

    Jun 28, 2014


  • The grammar in this whole thing is very awkward. Some sentences tend to run on for too long, ("Stephanie shouted, slamming her right arm....."), some sentences are either out of ...

    Jun 28, 2014

  • Short Story » Horror, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Facing Heaven

    Before I begin this review, I just have one thing to say: SHORTEN YOUR PARAGRAPHS! It's not enjoyable to read a giant wall of text followed by a short sentence ...

    Mar 15, 2014


  • I've never really reviewed poetry before, so there's a slight chance that I'll have no idea what I'm talking about. What I'm seeing here seems to be the thought process ...

    Jan 21, 2014

  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, General
    Re: Lights Went Off.

    I really liked the imagery. Very descriptive, very vivid and whatnot and the story is pretty much driven by it. The frequent repetition of "the house" did kind of throw ...

    Jan 19, 2014

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Puddles

    Well first of all, it would help to have paragraphs within the story. Second, this is by far one of my favorite stories on this site. The completely nutty left ...

    Jan 19, 2014


The wince that you wince when you see your quote in the quote generator is quite a wince, I tell ya. To know that the whole YWS community has read and judged your quote is quite an awkward feeling like oh noes. *manly blush*
— Arcticus