Griffinwings

Thanks for that: the change from 'icy' to 'fiery' is a good idea. I'm not altogether sure who the characters are here. I wasn't planning to take this any further ...

Yep, I'd agree with the above. It seems to have come straight from your mind, unaltered. Nice and pure. I like!

I like this very much! You seem to have managed to refrain from using great clumps of description, which always makes books much easier to read. This is very dialogue-y ...

Just... For an orc, this creature moved surprisingly quiet. Should that not be 'quietly'? Otherwise, that was really good! Especially as you said it was an on-the-spot piece of work. ...

Not even half a story. But I couldn't seem to find a board for random spewings of the keyboard, so I guess here seems most appropriate. Criticism would be appreciated: ...

Thanks everybody.

Hi everybody. -nervous wave- Woah, it seems like so long since I've joined a forum like this! I'm tongue-tied. OK. Sorry, I'll pull myself together. -deep breath- Yep, well I ...