Griffinkeeper

Further orders were given as the SPEW Commandos tried to figure out what to do with them. Snoink replied. Grif was the first to receive it. It looked like a ...

I changed it. Missed the word "landing."

I didn't make it up. This is supported by

All right is the formal version. It is used with formal pieces of writing and editing. Alright is informal and is used in dialogue. So in this case it works. ...

Paragraphing is an ongoing process throughout the story. It's a part of grammar. You don't just use periods at the beginning of the story, but at the end of every ...

The Warthogs parked next to a ladder. The Commandos piled out and Master Chief and Cortana followed. "Alright, just up this ladder and we should be in the street in ...

I didn't like the Starship trooper angle, so it's been changed.

What is Lolita about, very generally speaking?

I edited the rating, so it shows it now. There was some problems a while back, let Nate know if there is any further problems with it.

The Warthogs flew off the side of the highway. Grif saw a mech perpendicular to them, and in a smooth movement, he turned the turret towards the mech and fired. ...

Changed to fit Snoink's critique. Don't worry Crysi, I'm working on ways to add more people. I wanted to start small, so I didn't have to juggle so many people.

The Warthogs weren't all the same. The first one was mounted with a gauss gun, while the second one was mounted with a gattling gun. Six Warthogs in all. Phoenix ...

"At ease Jensen." "But Sarge-" "Damn it Jensen, haven't you seen the SPEW Commandos before? Did the flood rip out your mind and your ears!?" " Sergeant Johnson! We're glad ...

As the laser focused on Grif's head, the ground suddenly shook. "The Daishi is coming to make friends!" Areida said. "Daishi? Oh crap," the Elemental said. The Daishi came into ...

I'm scared, though I count for even less, as I'm not even acknowledged outside the story by one of the people in it. I think Grif only likes a fourth ...